Saturday, February 02, 2008

Care

See him,
See him stumble along
All rags and bags and beer bottles

See him stoop
And grasp
A morsel found
Chocolate bar
From gritty ground

See him lift and furtively place
Morsel found into bearded face
And chew

See him chew and stare
At you; as you draw near
And fetid breath drifts on air
It dawns, not chocolate
But doggy doo…

13 comments:

keith hillman said...

Oh yuk! Nice piece though.

tumblewords said...

Ackkk. What a foul piece - nicely done!

Clockworkchris said...

You caught me very off guard as well. Wonderful!

myrtle beached whale said...

finally, someone who makes my take on "foul" seem almost nice. Well done.

The Mama Bear said...

Did he think it was a tootsie roll?
Marvelous twist and great use of the theme this week.

Redness said...

Ohhhhhhh Noooooooo - Foul - but cleverly done!

paisley said...

eeeewwwww... two ucky ones in a row!!!!!

very well done ... never saw it coming .. the chocolate bar would have been bad enough!!!!

Novel Nymph said...

only you could have written a piece like that and my love for chocolate and your artistry remain intact!;)

Novel

anthonynorth said...

Now a question: which has more nutrients, I wonder?

gautami tripathy said...

That ending is truly great..

fouled up, have you?

Linda Jacobs said...

Well done! I never expected that! Excuse me while I run to the bathroom!

bipolarbear said...

Oh yuck!

LittleWing said...

oh that is very good... and i like your title... reminds me of that movie ... caddyshack... when he was cleaning the pool... and it was a candy bar...